Quote from: SigmundI love a different word that starts with M...I doubt I need to remind anyone.

But have you seen Sweden: Heaven or Hell?:heh:

Quote from: SigmundOn page 23, the Heading for the Technites path is at the very bottom of the lefthand column, but the description text starts at the top of the righthand column. Bringing these two things together would be a Good Thing.

On page 23, in the beginning of the section on Spellcasters, the text states, "Depending on the manifestation of the supernatural in the setting, spellcasters may be widely known and respected (or feared) for their
powers, or operate entirely behind the scenes." I would say that since this is for a specific setting it might be more useful to describe how the Spellcaster relates to the public in this setting specifically.

Since I haven't read through the whole book yet, I'm not sure if you haven't done this yet, but I'm typing it out so I don't read on and forget to come back to it. On page 24, in the section describing the Agriotes path you refer to rolling a d100. We all know what that means, but someone new to rping looking at your book as their first choice might not, so if ya don't describe somewhere how to roll a d100 ya might want to.

On page 26, the Pteraulos suffers the same problem as the Technites I described above.

On page 26, in the section on Rasputitsa, the next to last sentence says, "Almost all of them are utterly." Not sure what this means.

On page 28, in the Cataphract section you wrote, "They are armed with a long spear (kontos), long sword and light armor. Some also use a short bow or javelins. They wear heavy armor and their horses are barded." Does this mean there are 2 types of Cataphract? Ones who carry kontos, long sword, and light armor....and others who carry short bow, javelins, heavy armor, and have barded horses?

Page 30, in the section on Monachos, second sentence, youo wrote, "these are many ohers" instead of "there are many others".

A general suggestion I have is to provide a suggested group of feats and skills to select for each path at first level to provide novice players with a guide to how a character might start along each path. This would be useful especially for the martial artist paths.

On page 35, in the section entitled Skills, you wrote, "spelclaster" instead of "spellcaster".

On page 36, in the Gender section, in the last sentence a space needs to added between "female" and "to".

BTW, love the names section...great list of choices, and love that there are different lists for different cultures.

On page 41, in the Modifiers section under Skill Basics, the second word is written as, "modi.ers" instead of "modifiers".

On page 42, in the very top section of the righthand column entitled Check, the word "Difficulty" is misspelled "Di.culty".

On page 44, under the Concentration skill, in the section called Try Again, the word "effects" is misspelled as "e.ects".

On page 45, under Disable Device, the Open Locks section, third sentence, the place name Phydea isn't capitalized.

On page 47, under the Intimidate skill, next to last sentence, you misspell "suffer" as "su.er".

On page 48, in the first full sentence of the lefthand column you misspell "firmly" as ".rmly".

On page 50, in the Stealth skill description, Size Modifiers section, the third word "modifier" is misspelled "modi.er".

Page 56-57, I'd move the Call of the Wild (General) title from page 56 to 57 so it's not hangin there all by it's lonesome.

The feats section looks pretty good, I'm about halfway through it now. Will advance the post again when I discover more.

Quote from: SigmundThe feats section looks pretty good, I'm about halfway through it now. Will advance the post again when I discover more.

Keep 'em coming! BTW, anyone who helps in this process will be credited as an editor (if they desire). I really appreciate all this!

Quote from: SigmundOn page 35, in the section entitled Skills, you wrote, "spelclaster" instead of "spellcaster".

On page 36, in the Gender section, in the last sentence a space needs to added between "female" and "to".

BTW, love the names section...great list of choices, and love that there are different lists for different cultures.

On page 41, in the Modifiers section under Skill Basics, the second word is written as, "modi.ers" instead of "modifiers".

On page 42, in the very top section of the righthand column entitled Check, the word "Difficulty" is misspelled "Di.culty".

On page 44, under the Concentration skill, in the section called Try Again, the word "effects" is misspelled as "e.ects".

On page 45, under Disable Device, the Open Locks section, third sentence, the place name Phydea isn't capitalized.

On page 47, under the Intimidate skill, next to last sentence, you misspell "suffer" as "su.er".

On page 48, in the first full sentence of the lefthand column you misspell "firmly" as ".rmly".

On page 50, in the Stealth skill description, Size Modifiers section, the third word "modifier" is misspelled "modi.er".

Page 56-57, I'd move the Call of the Wild (General) title from page 56 to 57 so it's not hangin there all by it's lonesome.

The feats section looks pretty good, I'm about halfway through it now. Will advance the post again when I discover more.

On page 67, Under the Run feat, you misspell "five" as ".ve".

Here's an idea I've kicked around, but haven't done anything with yet...maybe you'll like it. I've always thought that a great use/side-effect of Taunt, or in your case Scathing Wit, would be to cause a character who has the Rage ability to start a Rage unwillingly.

Page 68-69, Surprise Attack (Expert) description title needs to be moved from 68 to rejoin the rest of the description on page 69.

On page 69, In the Talented description, the next to last word "different" is misspelled as "di.erent".

On page 70, in the Uncanny Dodge description, last sentence, the word "flat-footed" is misspelled ".at-footed".

On page 71, in the Weapon Training description, the word "suffer" is misspelled "su.er".

Gotta feed the baby...be back in a bit.

Reading over the Elemental Conduit power, and I'm confused by what the Intelligence check is for. Is the check made to use the power? If the caster is a wis or cha caster is the check still and int check? Can any skills like Knowledge: Planes or Knowledge: Supernatural give any bonuses to making this check?

On page 82, the title for the Enhance Other description needs moved from the bottom of the lefthand column to the top of the righthand column.

On page 84, in the description of the Heart Shaping power, under the Rage subsection, "effects" is misspelled "e.ects".

On page 86, the top of the lefthand column, a space needs inserted between Time subsection of the Magma Shaping power and the heading of the Manipulate Object power.

On page 88-89, the heading for the Nymph's Beauty power needs moved form the bottom of 88 to the top of 89 to reunite it with it's description.

On page 89, in the description of the Nymph's Beauty power, 4th sentence, the word "chose" needs to be replaced with the word "choose".

On page 94, in the Suggestion description, under the Retry subsection, the word "affect" is misspelled "a.ect".

On page 96, I would move the Wind Shaping power heading from the bottom of the lefthand column to the top of the righthand column to reunite it with it's description.

Once again, along with the wonderful descriptions of the martial orders, I would provide examples of feats that might be favored by students of each particular school.

On page 119, in the next to last sentence of the Leather Armor description, you mispelled the word "rogues" as "rouges".

Okay, I'm noticing a distinct overabundance of problems with "f".  That's gotta be some sort of software issue along the line.  A weird one, too.

Quote from: CyberzombieOkay, I'm noticing a distinct overabundance of problems with "f".  That's gotta be some sort of software issue along the line.  A weird one, too.

Yeah... I'm going to correct them.

I love the food section. A very often over-looked and underappreciated subject that can really create a sense of culture and flavor (yeah, punny) in a game.

Quote from: SigmundOn page 67, Under the Run feat, you misspell "five" as ".ve".

Here's an idea I've kicked around, but haven't done anything with yet...maybe you'll like it. I've always thought that a great use/side-effect of Taunt, or in your case Scathing Wit, would be to cause a character who has the Rage ability to start a Rage unwillingly.

Page 68-69, Surprise Attack (Expert) description title needs to be moved from 68 to rejoin the rest of the description on page 69.

On page 69, In the Talented description, the next to last word "different" is misspelled as "di.erent".

On page 70, in the Uncanny Dodge description, last sentence, the word "flat-footed" is misspelled ".at-footed".

On page 71, in the Weapon Training description, the word "suffer" is misspelled "su.er".

Gotta feed the baby...be back in a bit.

Reading over the Elemental Conduit power, and I'm confused by what the Intelligence check is for. Is the check made to use the power? If the caster is a wis or cha caster is the check still and int check? Can any skills like Knowledge: Planes or Knowledge: Supernatural give any bonuses to making this check?

On page 82, the title for the Enhance Other description needs moved from the bottom of the lefthand column to the top of the righthand column.

On page 84, in the description of the Heart Shaping power, under the Rage subsection, "effects" is misspelled "e.ects".

On page 86, the top of the lefthand column, a space needs inserted between Time subsection of the Magma Shaping power and the heading of the Manipulate Object power.

On page 88-89, the heading for the Nymph's Beauty power needs moved form the bottom of 88 to the top of 89 to reunite it with it's description.

On page 89, in the description of the Nymph's Beauty power, 4th sentence, the word "chose" needs to be replaced with the word "choose".

On page 94, in the Suggestion description, under the Retry subsection, the word "affect" is misspelled "a.ect".

On page 96, I would move the Wind Shaping power heading from the bottom of the lefthand column to the top of the righthand column to reunite it with it's description.

Once again, along with the wonderful descriptions of the martial orders, I would provide examples of feats that might be favored by students of each particular school.

On page 119, in the next to last sentence of the Leather Armor description, you mispelled the word "rogues" as "rouges".

On page 132, in the description of the Breathing Tube, in the third sentence, a space needs to be inserted between "himself" and "with".

On page 133, in the description of the Climbing Dagger, you mention the housebreaker harness, but then never provide any details about it.

On page 136, at the very end of the Arrow, Flare description is the following sentence: "Message Arrow: Sometimes, one needs to get an urgent." I'm guessing it shouldn't be there.

On page 136, in the description of the Arrow, Message, first sentence, a space needs to be inserted between the words "urgent" and "message".

I'm starting to make corrections to the master Quark file right now. Thank you so much for this Sigmund!:bow:

I have fixed all of those errors listed so far. The only ones I did not do involved the listing of feats for the character paths and philosophies. I know that would certainly add something to them, but I haven't decided yet as to whether or not that's something I want to tackle. That would be a big change, as I would have to add a page or two, renumber everything, and make sure it didn't screw up formatting down the line. I still might do it, but I dunno.

Well, wait until people have finished a first look-see and then worry about content changes.

I should finally be able to print something today!  Yay!  

Quote from: CyberzombieWell, wait until people have finished a first look-see and then worry about content changes.

I should finally be able to print something today!  Yay!  

Will do.

Quote from: ZalmoxisWill do.

Yeah, I'm just throwing that stuff out there....just suggestions and opinion, I'd defintely wait to see what others say before making big changes like that. CZ or others might have far better ideas than mine. Then again, they may say it's perfect the way it is.

Well, we'll see what I think soon.  I am finally printing!  Yay!  

Quote from: SigmundYeah, I'm just throwing that stuff out there....just suggestions and opinion, I'd defintely wait to see what others say before making big changes like that. CZ or others might have far better ideas than mine. Then again, they may say it's perfect the way it is.

Not that I want people to stop finding errors... you have been most helpful and I am very appreciative.