If it's not a game, what's it doing here in the Game Design and Theory Forum?
You don't get to call it a "roleplaying game" when you're asking for feedback, and then if someone says that making it a "game" trivialises it, say, "oh but it's not a game, anyway." You can't have it both ways.
Either it's a game, in which case it's necessarily superficial and triviliasing and insulting, or else it's not a game, in which case it doesn't belong in roleplaying game forums.
It's offensive to me as a Jew because it's trivialising and a shallow bit of intellectual masturbation. It's offensive to me as a roleplayer because it's not fun.
If you want strong emotions and "to understand", then go and have a life. Join the Red Cross and go and help out in Darfur, Sudan, or something. Fall in love and get your heart broken. Smuggle yourself into a country as an illegal immigrant and struggle to live on one-fifth minimum wage while evading immigration authorities. Forget your "interactive story" - live a real life with real fears, real loves, real hates, real passions.
No Jew would ever write this thing, any more than a woman would write one about rape victims. I think that tells you something.